Allison TS#13

06/08/2018
Tutoring Session #13 of 16

Topic: Writing
Materials: previous essays, conclusion worksheet
We read PJ's essay that he had for homework, about whether gym or recess should be included for middle school students. I had him color code his essay with highlighters to indicate where the strengths were, such as transitions. Then we circled areas that could be made stronger. We started to really focus on the importance of a conclusion, especially restating the thesis statement from the introduction. It's harder to rephrase the thesis in a creative way, so we will continue this in upcoming sessions. For homework, he has planning, an essay, and then scoring his essay based on the FSA rubric so he is careful in his writing. 

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